haiku in sketchbook

sapkota`s haiku was published in the september / october 31, 2011 “cemetery” haiku thread sketchbook. guest editor for the haiku thread bernard gieske from usa discusses about the haiku techniques. in his review gieske refer sapkota`s haiku as an example of sketch or shiki`s shahsei technique.  shasei means sketch from life. the poet simply states what he sees. the trick is to do this is a way that doesn’t become boring. the selected haiku was:

 

crematorium—
an abandoned letter
rustles

he further comments “in the strictest sense, i assume this technique involves only the sense of sight. including the other senses as well makes it more interesting but then it might be considered as the sense switching technique. it’s perfectly acceptable to use more than one technique. in this haiku janak has us not only seeing the moving letter but hearing it calling for attention. just now, thinking about this, this might also be considered a sabi, which i explain later. the letter is abandoned, not just forgotten, which is deliberate. this is a crematorium which adds the note of destruction. what is the story about what happened?”. detailed review on haiku techniques with examples from various other haiku can be read here.

 

(featured image: sumi-e by havayoth.deviantart.com on pinterest @deviantart)

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